water gap

October 14, 2008


two mountains reach down
cup the river in bedrock
eternal playmates

painting by Edward Raymes

Posted in 1, autumn, haiku, leaves, Miscellaneous, nature, Poetry, tree, writing | 8 Comments »

8 Responses to “water gap”

  1. krkbaker Says:

    October 15, 2008 at 1:34 pm

    “Eternal playmates”, I like that idea. Kind of like they are constantly teasing one another, like in a game of tag or something. If one zigs, the other zigs, and if it zags…you know. Fun.
    kim

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  2. qazse Says:

    October 17, 2008 at 12:43 am

    Hello kim! Would “eternal lovers” work better? Or would that connote more tenderness than anything else?

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  3. Wayne Says:

    October 20, 2008 at 11:22 am

    I do appreciate your style and economy of words. Beautiful. Thank you.

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  4. qazse Says:

    October 20, 2008 at 9:06 pm

    Wayne, thank You!

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  5. tipota Says:

    October 25, 2008 at 11:17 am

    very lovely. i am inspired, thankyou

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  7. krkbaker Says:

    November 6, 2008 at 9:27 am

    Q, no I’d leave it as it is. I really like it. Lovers would overdo it.

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  8. qazse Says:

    November 6, 2008 at 1:22 pm

    Kim, thank you for the feedback. I appreciate it. I will keep it as is – playful, zigging and zagging…

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