infusion or mutation

January 22, 2009

shadows emerge
we take flight

we take flight

we forever
take flight

from one moment
to the next

we take flight

until –

we are willing
to die

to stand
our ground

not waver
nor blink

stand our ground

and be swatted.

7 Responses to “infusion or mutation”

  1. howard Says:

    I love this. “To stand our ground and be swatted” is a beautiful idea to which I feel some relation.

  2. narendra Says:

    now th hardest thing is to be short and speak large…wonderfull poem…-narendra
    http://frozenwell.wordpress.com/

    (sorry need to advertise:))

  3. qazse Says:

    howard – thanks. I initially was inspired by the flight of birds from our deck whenever I approached the window from within. I thought what it might look like if a bird would face down a cat instead of flying off. It wasn’t until I sat down to write that I realized the universality of the event/phenomenon.

    narenda – thank you. You don’t have to apologize for the link back. It is standard.

    first revision:

    shadows emerge
    in our wide eyes
    we take flight

    we take flight
    we forever
    take flight

    from one day
    to the next
    we take flight

    until
    we are willing
    to die –

    to stand
    our ground

    and be swatted.

  4. Paul Says:

    The revision fills out the idea but I prefer the original because the ending is so effective. There is the pause…and be swatted. It comes down like onomatapoiea. Very cool.

  5. pauline Says:

    this has to be one of the best life/death poems I’ve read

  6. qazse Says:

    pauline, hello! thank you, that is a great compliment.


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